Thursday, May 10, 2012

Moondance

I’m really looking forward to reading everyone’s entry to this week’s Friday Flash Fiction photo provided Madison Woods  http://madisonwoods.wordpress.com/ When I first saw the photo, I imagined stories of Werewolves and other evil creatures going bump in the night. As might be expected, I took the road less traveled. As always, I look forward to your feedback. Thanks for stopping by.

Moondance

Moonbeams danced through the intermittent clouds drifting high above the scattered trees. Chad, Amy, Mark, and Veronica planned to spend the evening watching a meteor shower on the banks of Wildcat Creek. On the way, they stopped by One-Eyed Jack’s and picked up a quart of double-run shine.
The couples lay in the bed of Mark’s truck listening to Van Morrison and passing the fruit jar. Clouds obscured any view of meteors, but the liquid corn cast its own sparkle across the celestial canvas.
When the last drop was drained Chad hopped upon the pick-up cab, pulled down his pants and shouted, “Look everybody. It’s the moon over my Amy.”

19 comments:

  1. Now this I love! I can't quit laughing. Good job!

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  2. Oh My God! I couldn't help laughing, but that was the worst joke ever - and yet the most enchanting tale! I don't know what else to say. But I am still laughing. I can hardly type!
    Yours, as ever,
    Laura
    http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com

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  3. That last line is just so corny I can't help but laugh. Not corny in a bad way, though. Corny in a "I can totally see that happening" kind of way.

    My attempt: http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/death-cart/

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  4. Great voice in this, it's got all the right kind of language and the imagery at the end, well... :)

    Mine's at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/you-called-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

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  5. I absolutely love puns and so few appreciate how tough it is to get them right. Lowest form of humor my... well, you get it.

    Here's mine:
    http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/stay/

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  6. Awesome! Loved it! Totally giggling about this right now! I know you've been by (thank you!) but for your other readers, here's my submission: http://theforgottenwife.com/2012/05/11/friday-fictioneers/

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  7. You took the road-less-travelled all right, Russell. Wondeful, funny as always. (Don't I always say that on yours? It's true.)

    I especially liked the Van Morrison part -- it "put me right there." Nice touch. :)

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    1. Obviously I mean "wondeRful."

      Here's mine:
      http://janmorrill.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/flashfriday-fictioneers-hes-watching/

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  8. Oh no! This is just well,........funny? You bet! I am here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/fridayfictioneers-tanoas-baby/

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  9. Dear Russell,

    This was your most subtle, and as a result, one of your most sneaky funny stories ever. Moon over my Amy. I'm in awe of you and searching like Google through my brain for other moon lyrics you could have used. That's amore. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  10. :) here is mine: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/howling-at-the-moon-flash-fiction-for-51112/#comments

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  11. ok, nothing like being so dumb, that you put in the wrong link...let me try that again. My real link is http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/its-here-the-weekend-is-nigh-fridayfictioneers-on-buffalo-river/

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  12. Very silly ending to a nicely detailed and believable story. Thanks for the laugh!

    Wakefield
    http://www.wakefieldmahon.com/1/post/2012/05/the-good-old-days-friday-fictioneers.html

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  13. Hi neighbor,
    Glad to commune with a fellow Van Morrison fan. I was playing his best of CD just before I read your piece. It was a fun read, as always.
    Here's my story: http://bridgesareforburning.wordpress.com/

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  15. Gheesh! Having a difficult time posting tonight. Will give it one more try. Russell...Once again, thanks for the chuckles...will even kick in a few giggles this time. Here's mine;
    www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

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  16. Ha! Oh to be that age again (I´ve read them as teenagers). Nicely done, the first funny tale I've read on this prompt. Thanks for the laugh :-D

    http://mysocalleddutchlife.wordpress.com/2012/05/12/following-footsteps/

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  17. Certainly a funny scene. And the music is now stuck in my head. Well done.

    Here's mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/2012/05/10/flash-fiction-friday-3/

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  18. I am impressed how you make this into a genuine story as well as a good joke. Nicely done, Russell!

    I'm over here: http://elmowrites.wordpress.com/2012/05/11/friday-fiction-halloween/

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